Please bear with me, I've tried to familiarize myself with this forums posting habits, but it may take me a while to get used to them. Keep in mind this all a work in progress of course, so all of these are working ideas, with no working names just yet. I would just like some feed back as to how it sounds so far. I know it's sparse, but I'm really trying to come up with an outline first. This story I am working on started as pretty much a spark of an idea in the middle of my International Business class. Unfortunately now it's all I do in that class - thinking about this story and how it's unfolding - but it's making for what seems to be a decent storyline. I have no real story written yet, just the working outline. The story starts in the space above a planet, as two opposing factions of humans clash for control of the resources in the mountains far below on the surface. The "good" faction (your faction) has a massive capital ship in orbit, along with a few cruisers and battleships. The "evil" faction has a massive force set on destroying your forces and capturing the planet. The scene unfolds with massive fighter screens being launched from both factions, with both sides taking relatively heavy losses. The evil faction has another plan up its sleeve. On the other side of the sun, where your sensors cannot detect, they are sending a device into the sun to cause a supernova. As the battle ensues, the evil faction seems to back off, retrieving their fighters and pulling their cruisers out of the fray. Thinking that they had won, the good faction becomes a bit euphoric as the evil faction hyperspaces out. Then the massive supernova is detected on sensors, and desperation overcomes the fleet. Fighters are entering the landing bays on the capital ship without authorization, several cruisers collide attempting to dock with the capital ship, and the battleships jump out immediately, having no landing bays. The capital ship is forced to wait until the last fighters manage to either crash-land in her fighter bays, or bury themselves in her hull. The supernova shock wave is almost upon the capital ship when she jumps. As the ship enters hyperspace, the shock wave catches it, and gives it an incredible kinetic energy. The ship is thrust thousands of light years farther than she ever intended or was capable of traveling herself... Now in the middle of unknown space, the capital ship is forced to establish a civilization in this section of the galaxy, knowing that getting home is near impossible. The leadership aboard the ship decides to travel to the nearest star, which happens to be located just on the outskirts of a massive nebula. _____________ This is about all I really have. If it were used in a game, it probably be an introductory cinematic. Then again, it is just an idea... A few things I would like to explain: The Capital Ship: This ship is designed to be completely self-sufficient, able to survive in deep space without aid theoretically indefinitely. This massive ship houses a community of thousands of humans. Though military personnel operate its fighters and primary systems, there is a significant portion of the population that is civilian. These civilians have their own government, economy and culture on board. They run the manufacturing and resource collection plants, as well as the agriculture aboard. For those who have played Homeworld 2, you may liken this ship to the Mothership in the game, but to a much more massive extent. Much like the Mothership, this capital ship can process raw materials, build new fighters and cruisers, and jump through hyperspace. However, this ship, unlike the Mothership is a massive city, containing a civilian population, meant for deep space exploration and production.

Oh, and yes I have more story, just I have three branches that I'm working with and I have yet to decide which one to use...

1. What kind of game is this for?
2. Why are there so many civilians on the capital ship? Why can't your faction put all the non-combatants on a different ship far from the fighting?
3. If they have the technology to cause a supernova, why can't their engines get them home?
4. Pay attention in class.

Answers from a factual angle:

1.There is none of what you speak, for this is the plot, not the design.

2.The only way I could possibly theorise a way to have a vessel of that size staffed and crewed by pure military would be PMC's, so a civilian percentage would simply be a fact of nature.

3.Igniting carbon fusion is possible with a large enough bomb, and if they have time to sit and poke the thing while on the other side of the sun, it shouldn't be too hard.

4.Hire a monkey to take notes, there has to be a few apes somewhere.

Questions of my own:

1. What are the exact resources they are fighting over?

2. What would drive one faction to destroy such said resources when it became apparent they would not be able to harvest them?

3. Are you accounting for the NLS (near light speed) time distortion?

4. What form of government rules the ship?

5. How long will it take to run out of processable material?

6. What technological developments form the base of this reality?

7. Does religion come into play?

8. Is genetic modification legal?

9. Has alien life been found previously?

10. Is this one question too many?

Finally some responses :P

Those are a lot of very good questions that I probably would not have thought of myself. Thank you. I'll attempt to answer them after my class tonight. Another night class that is extremely boring :).

But to answer a couple: Religion doesn't come into play, and alien life hasn't been found before.

A very nice idea, I liked the astronomy bits coming in :)
Here are some questions :

What type of game is this ( genre ) ?

Who is the main character/s ?

Do you play for the faction in space or on the land of the planet aswell ?

Who are the bad faction ( robots, humans ) ?

Everything you have described, is it gameplay or are parts of it cinematics ?

What is the basic history of the factions ( how did they become enemies, where did they take sides, are they new enemies or have they been enimes for centuries ) ?

At the end you mention "home", what exactly is the good faction's home ? Is it the planet that the factions were fighting over ?

Hope these questions will give you more ideas and details to bring into the story :)